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Lesson 6 – Final Touches and Editing
Year 10 ELL – Portfolio Completion
Learning Intention
We are learning to:
Edit for grammar and punctuation
Improve vocabulary and sentence clarity
Revise writing to make it more formal and structured
Prepare our final portfolio for submission
Success Criteria
✔ I can correct grammar and punctuation errors
✔ I can improve unclear sentences
✔ I can replace simple words with stronger vocabulary
✔ My final portfolio shows improvement across lessons
🌿 Honouring Te Tiriti o Waitangi
In this lesson we:
Respect each other’s voice and identity in writing
Provide feedback in a supportive and mana-enhancing way
Recognise growth and progress in learning
Feedback should be respectful and constructive.
Part 1 – Editing for Accuracy (Individual First)
Correct the mistakes in this paragraph:
i went to the marae last weekend it was very exciting we learned about matariki and we listened to stories from our kaumātua it was fun and interesting
Rewrite correctly:
Part 2 – Improving Vocabulary
Simple words can be improved.
Example:
Simple:
The day was good.
Improved:
The day was memorable and meaningful.
Improve These Sentences:
The trip was fun.
→ __________________________________________I was happy.
→ __________________________________________The meeting was important.
→ __________________________________________
Part 3 – Sentence Clarity
Sometimes sentences are too long or unclear.
Example:
Unclear:
I didn’t go to school because I was sick and it was raining and I forgot my homework.
Improved:
I did not attend school because I was unwell. In addition, I had forgotten my homework.
Improve This Sentence:
I think school is good because it helps students and teachers and the community and it is important.
→ __________________________________________
→ __________________________________________
Part 4 – Peer Review (Structured and Timed – 7 Minutes)
Swap ONE portfolio piece with a partner.
Silently:
✔ Circle one strong sentence
✔ Underline one sentence that needs improvement
✔ Check punctuation
✔ Check capital letters
Write:
One strength:
One suggestion:
Return work quietly.
Part 5 – Independent Revision
Choose ONE portfolio piece to improve first.
Checklist:
☐ Clear introduction
☐ Paragraphs organised
☐ Linking words used
☐ Formal tone (if required)
☐ Spelling checked
☐ Punctuation corrected
Revise your work below or on your device.
🌿 UDL Choices – How You Edit
You may:
☐ Edit on paper using coloured pens
☐ Edit digitally
☐ Read your work quietly to yourself
☐ Ask teacher for one-to-one clarification
☐ Use a checklist organiser
All students must submit a polished final version.
Final Reflection
What improvement did you make today?
Which piece shows your biggest progress? Why?
Portfolio Submission
Submit:
✔ Informal Writing
✔ Recount Writing
✔ Narrative/Descriptive Writing
✔ Formal Letter
✔ Persuasive Writing
✅ Teacher Key
Part 1 – Corrected Version
I went to the marae last weekend. It was very exciting. We learned about Matariki, and we listened to stories from our kaumātua. It was fun and interesting.
Check for:
Capital letters
Full stops
Proper nouns (Matariki)
Sentence separation
Part 2 – Vocabulary Samples
The trip was enjoyable and rewarding.
I was proud and satisfied.
The meeting was significant and meaningful.
(Allow appropriate synonyms.)
Part 3 – Improved Sentence Example
I believe school is valuable because it supports students, teachers, and the wider community. Therefore, education plays an important role in society.
What to Look For in Final Portfolio
Clear progression across drafts
Improved sentence structure
Reduced basic grammar errors
Stronger vocabulary
Genre awareness (formal vs informal vs persuasive)
🌿 Te Tiriti Alignment
Partnership: Collaborative peer review
Protection: Respectful handling of identity and cultural content
Participation: Every student contributes and reflects on growth